Proofreading complete.
Interesting that spores were changed to shields/turrets. When I get to the ship list, I make some comments on names. Take them or leave them. Just feedback.
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Pg 2
1st paragraph, you forgot hive fleet jormungandr.
Pg 3
1st column, last line
"Swarms, flood across The Tyranids' defenceless"- The should not be capatalized.
2nd Column, THE HIVE MIND. "hive fleet" should be capatalized to follow your formatting convention used throughout.
3rd Column, THE HIVE FLEETS. "as the warship-sized bio construct"- construct should be plural.
Retrenched should be entrenched.
What two categories?
Pg 4
1st Column three main classes are mentioned, but then only 2 main classes are discussed: Hive ships and drone ships. Probably need to make it clearer that you are talking about Proteus as a 3rd type (I think you are).
Fluff piece- 3rd line, career should be careen. Last line, limbs and spare should be swaped to say spare limbs.
Pg 5
Why is hive ship not capitalized?
Why is Command in Command check done with a capital C but check a lowercase c?
Pg 6
Second Column, second line. "androll" missing a space. 4th line "theyir" should be "their". 6th line sentence stating with All requires a space between the period and word All.
3rd Column, second to last line "are additional the the" should be "to the".
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Pg 10
Proteus Hive Ship, 4th line- Th refore, missed an e.
Pg 11
Charybdis Hive Ship- The big T at the description start is too low. The Prow weapon table extrection duct line seems off. Keep Weapon Launch Glands verticle table lines messed up. Same with Port/Stbd weapons. For the port/stbd weapon Strengths, I would do 2/2 or 1/1 instead of 2+2 or 1+1. The note at the bottom should say "as such" not "hence" In the fluff piece, I would move the big A to the left a little.
I would call the picture "Leviathan Hive Fleet Hive Ship"
Pg 12
Scylla Hive Ships- Port/Stbd weapons launch glands verticle dividing lines messed up.For the port/stbd weapon Strengths, I would do 2/2 or 1/1 instead of 2+2 or 1+1.
Pg 13
Kraken Carnivore- I might call it Kraken Razorfiend to go with the model's name., or something not Kraken, as to not confuse it with the common kraken.. In the description, 5th line, ants should be lowercase. 4th line from the bottom, last word "creature" should be plural.
Pg 14
Leviathan Prowler- seems like a confusing name, seeing as hive ships are commonly referred to as leviathan hive ships, and even are in this pdf. Maybe just a Prowler Drone, or Prowler Kraken. In the description, vanguard should be lowercase as to not confuse it with the Vanguard ship OR use a different word. Though it seems to be a type on Vanguard. Maybe call it a Vanguard Prowler, and the other one a Vanguard Drone since it is an escort.
The fluff piece was already used on pg 8.
Pg 15
Emergent Drone- Keel weapon launch glands verticle dividing lines messed up.
Pg 16
Predator Kraken- I would call it the Kraken Predator, to follow the naming convention of the Kraken Carnivore.
In the description, 'Ramsmiter Kraken' in quotes, but Deathburner is not, either both should or should not be.
Pg 17
Leviathan Vanguard, may just call it Vanguard Drone, especially if you go with Vanguard Prowler for the Leviathan Prowler.
In the description, Hormagaunts are not an infiltration creature. Leapers more commonly known as Deathleapers.
Pg 18
TYRANID HIVE FLEETS
In the 1st paragraph, Sectors should be lowercase.
Put a space between the word Hive and Ships for the "HIVESHIPS" section. Under hiveships, for the Proteus fleet restrictions, 0-6E mergent Drones. Need a space between the 6 and E and remove the space between the E and m.
Captial Ships- remove the space before Capital and put a space between Capital and Ships.
Minor Synapse Nodes- Still refers to juvenile hive ships. Should be Scylla hive ships. Where it does say Scylla Hive Ships, there needs to be a space between Scylla and Hive.
ESCORTS- There is a random letter F after "Hive Ships"
VANGUARD FLEETS- Need a space between VANGUARD and FLEETS.
GESTATING FLEETS- Need a space between GESTATING and FLEETS. 3rd line from the bottom, of should be or and "Gertating" should be Gestating. Last line, range is missing an e on the end. There seems to be no incentive to play a Gestating Fleet.
The Hive Fleet list fails to allow you to just by ordnance like the original tyranids list did, without a carrier. Is that intentional? Seems like it shouldn't be since you mention anti-bodies in the scenarios.
Pg 19
Cruiser Clash rules, should say they may use one BB and 3 CA or one Charybdis Hiveship and 3 scylla or kraken
